Name: Thunder

Age: 2

Gender: Brute

Pack: -

Rank: Loner

Appearance: Pure black pelt corrupted by one patch of white. This white is placed on his left cheek in the shape of a sharp lighting bolt. It is thin and skinny, only visible from a closer distance. As a pup he once was teased by other pups about this but soon found it could be a joy to have and he lives up to it. Orbs the color of gold filled with love, joy, and excitement. He is a small structured wolf, but is mainly made of muscle. He has a skinny body frame making it all the more easier to jump and dodge through obsticales he may find fit to run through.

Personality: Thunder is a very energetic wolf and loves to play games and have fun. His specialty is agility and can weave in and out of different objects with ease. He is often considered as a clown for he is almost always in a good and loving mood. He is very good at hiding as well. He can disguise himself to be completely invisible in the shadows. Mastering the art of silent steps he can sneak up behind many unnoticed. He loves to take long strolls beside friends and loves to talk about almost anything. Although he his friendly, he can be very protective. He doesn't like it when others mess with what is his, nor does he like it when others tease him in a hurtful manner.

History: When Thunder was just a pup, his parents were killed by an evil wolf. The sister of that evil wolf took him under her paw after being ordered to end his life. Thankfully she refused and fought her sister, fleeing in the end taking Thunder with her. He was constantly in her view and loved her as a second mother. Soon they found a pack though she wasn't that nice to them at first. Eventually she was accepted and he stayed in the shadows for quite some time before he pranced out to great her.

Living in this pack, he learned fast the importance of agility and loved every minute of running in and out of random objects. He was a cluts by purpose and loved to bring smiles to the pack. Eventually the now friendly wolfess gave him to be adopted by the alpha of the pack. He immediately grew attached to the big wolven. One day three more pups were born and he then had a brother and two sisters.

One dark and stormy night, the evil wolfess who killed his parents returned to this pack. The fight lasted what seemed to be years until the evil wolf and the other wolf who had tagged along fled with satisfied expressions. After the fight the alpha called a meeting saying they must go their separate ways. Heart broken, Thunder left the area leaving his home behind him. Now he searches for the right pack for him.

Welcome aboard Thunder; though I hate to be a bother you should just add a few more sentences to your appearance. As of many us have come across that it is rather difficult to describe our wolves, however I could perhaps point you in the right direction. In you personality you mentioned that your wolf excels greatly in agility wise. Well that is actually something describing your wolf so if you would kindly proceed to just edit that sentence and put it in your appearance.

The second would be to prolong your personality, maybe describe exactly what sort of generous brute he is? Or fill us in a moment of his absurd actions, does he act like a pup? Is he a craven over the most practical things or can he be somewhat clumsy at times? Some other emotions you should consider is that does your wolf comprehend evil… or maybe he just assumes the world is benevolent? Maybe add in he’s somewhat grumpy, jealous of other brutes, a few quirks, flaws even to just excite us with something more original then the same old.

The third would be to check your spelling, by this you should review before you post or use that wonderful ABC spell check. In overall you have done fairly well, I’m sure you will be very fun to rp with and please don’t hesitate to ask a question either. I’m pretty sure you’ll get the jive of things around here

All done. That better? :P