Name: foreg
Gender:brute
Age: 5


Appearence: He is a tallish wolf with very long legs. He eyes are of the purest gold, like that on a sunny day. His awkward snout, is pointed out and slightly twisted at the end. His very long fur, can withstand thorns and the harsh cold. But, his tail is very short and vurnerable. He is the color of very dark brown, not black, but close to it. His gait, is awkward, though he has no trouble walking. His voice sounds sore, but he has no trouble talking,and he isn't sick. He is pretty good-looking for his age compared to most wolves of his age. Lastly, his ears are very pointy, as pointy as a porcipines quills.

Personality: He is mostly grumpy and doesn't like to be waked from a good sleep. He is a playful brute, to say. He jokes, but not that much. He doesn't like to be by himself. He always seeks the comfort of other packs, most, not accepting him. He loves the winter, considering it's the harshest time of the year. He thinks he's ready to breed, but can't be sure.

He hates wolves who pick on others, and will help out any wolf in need. He would make an excellent friend. If he joined a pack, he would use his own life to defend it.

History: He was born of noble blood. Both his parents were in a pack. He was the only one that was born though, no stillborn pups at all. His parents loved him and didn't want to live in a pack anymore. They ventured off in search of another home, but when they were founded out by another wolf, they were assinated, because of their betrail. Both his parents were killed while he was hid. He didn't get to know his parents long enough to love them. He was still very young at the time. A wolf found him and adopted him. He spent the rest of his teen years living with that wolf. He learned to hunt and take care of himself. Until, that day when his "parent" died of old age, he was sad.He was very happy before that event, and knew he didn't like to live by himself. He wandered the rest of his teen years searching for a pack. But, everytime he tried, he was pushed out. And, still today, he searches for a pack that will accept him. He almost got into a pack, before he was almost killed by an omega. After that he didn't trust omega's, too afraid of what might happen to himself. When he was four however, he found a mate and had pups. But, all the pups were stillborn, and his mate died during labor. He wanders around, searching for a better life.

(SOoooooooo sorry everyone! i hope i can make up for it :unsure: :crybaby: )

You need at least one more sentence to your Appearance and at least four to history.

Also, you need to thicken your sentences and not make them so short. This goes for all sections.

Lastly, these sentences don't really make sense:

First you say he was happy about the death then you say he was sad. Choose one so that this isn't confusing :)

~Niccy