Name:Utada Rascur
Gender: Fae
Age: four
Close family members: Rad and Zoreem


Appearence: Utada in my opinion, is the most beautiful wolf there is. He pelt is the color of pure white snow. But, the top part of her back has a light gray "hood". Her eyes are the color of a clear sky. She has a long flowing tail that is light gray on top, and white underneath. Her ears are very pointy. Her body is surdy but slender in a way. Her long legs are made for running. Her fur is silky and long, but it doesn't make her look poofy. Her elagent appearence would make any wolf roll over. She has one little scar across her nose but, it's barely noticable. Her ears are pointy like I said but are gray tipped. Her muzzle is very small and is the color of a silver seal. Her beautiful eyes, are grey, mixed with the color of the moon. Her voice is soft and sweet, and comforts any wolf. Her gait is graceful, looking as if she was walking on clouds. Her weight is rather light, about 73 pounds, whichs is good weight for a fae wolf. Her light weight, could make you think she could walk on water, but alas she cannot.


Personality: She is a sassy wolf most of the time. She doesn't necisarly think she's all that. She high spirited, and always cheerful. She would never back down in a fight. She's always there to help a wolf. She would make an excellent friend and pack member. She is planning to join a pack soon. She figured that she would be suited to pack life. She loves pups, and would love to have some of her own. Her favorite time is winter. She loves snow, so it's easy to tell why. She is sweet in nature and always kind. But, like her brothers, she is a handful. She can turn her back on you though. Her words can cut you into a million peices. If she feels bad, sad or anything about something, she will make it known, and will demand respect. She will make sure that every wolf has their rights, and will speak passionatly about it, to insure that wolf gets the respect.

History: The overall story of utada's history is that she was born with two other siblings named Rad and Zoreem.. But, her mother died while giving birth and three other siblings were stillborn. The father tried to take car of them but, he got very sick and wasn't able to take care of them. The family of four met a rouge and the father died pprotecting them. Utada and her brothers were left to defend themselves. They learned to hunt bythemselves and take care of themselves. They soon split up and didn't see each other until a few months later. Utada found out that Rad had tried to join a pack and was seriously injured by the process. Utada helped him while he healed and then rad went off by himself. Zoreem had asked Utada about his whereabouts and she said he was fine. Utada and Zoreem are still waiting for Rad to this day. And Utada will always have a lump in her heart for that. After that, she tried to find her brother, but never succeded. She was later on, saved by Zoreem, when she was almost killed by a human. Then, she never tried to cross the border between, wolf and man. She was in a brawl, once, which got her the very tiny scar, on her nose. She met her brother Zoreem several times, before, venturing off. She has never seen her brothers after that. She was almost forcebred by another wolf, but escaped. She didn't want to have any pups after that, and nor shall she ever. But now she has changed and looking forward of someday maybe having pups. Many times has she tried to look for her brothers, and many times she had failed. But she hopes she will meet up with them once more. She had heard that her brother, Zoreem, had recently joined a pack, and that regained her spirits, and now, more than ever, she searches for him.

Add detail to appearance. Your sentences shouldn't be that short. It's boring when it is like that. When you do, it doesn't follow the standard. Catch me? ;)

Anyway, you need to construct your sentences more. I can barley get through the appearance without feeling like I am going to fall asleep XP Make it juicy! I know you have it in you! :D

Your application is fine except for your history, you cant write in first person. Please write in third person. Once you fix this you will be goo to go.

You say you've fixed it, however:

8 more sentences needed in history.

I'd think it best to take the bit about being the "perfect wolf" out of the personality. There is no such thing as a perfect wolf, and claiming to be one makes you come off as a bit spoiled or unrealistic. ;)

i fixed it up a bit, if anyone's there :blink: should be good to go