If anyone here is from NeoSeeker, you may know me from there as LeoPup19.
I have started my own poem thread there, too, so if you are a member there, get the link from my signature and comment if you can, please.
I would love some criticism, feel free to post in this thread.
I don't mind if you don't like any of these, but please, give reasons why, I would love to improve my work.
I'll start with my 2 most recent ones.

Sunset's Fascination

So far into the distance
Light covers land
Leaving one’s resistance
To escape so much demand

Colour illuminates the mountains
Clouds shade the sky
Land to no end
The wind’s soothing cry

Sky, the colours of the rainbow
And no less stunning
Like some sort of light show
Temptation’s returning

So captivating, the melody
As trees follow the breeze
So peaceful, the scenery
Sets my mind at ease

... Yet I must escape ...

~~Sept. 28, 2005~~

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::NOTE:: This poem has yet to be named. :P Any suggestions are open, and are greatly appreciated. Feel free to PM me with them. And nowwww...... No Name Poem!

Looking around the room
I don’t see anything anymore
What’s wrong...

I don’t recognize a single person
Not a single face
Something must be wrong...

Who are these people calling my name
I don’t even remember anymore
Everything is all wrong...

They tell me they care
I don’t know who they are
Why does it seem so wrong...

I don’t belong here
Why am I
I’ve never felt anything so wrong...

Nothing’s right
But still they ask what is wrong
And still, my answer...
Nothing is wrong......

~~Nov. 24, 2005~~

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As you may have realized, I sometimes have long writer's block gaps between poems. I may not update this thread often, but that does not mean I have forgotten about it. XD I will always be checking up on it, looking for comment from my peers. Thanks again.

~*~Syrai~*~

They're luffly, Jen^^ I'm not that great a poetry, but I suppose I'm educated enough in the field of writing to say they're pretty good. Perhaps you could call the second one, "Nothing's Wrong", or "Something's Wrong"? Such lame suggestions, I know XD

Edit: For some reason this topic was posted twice, so I deleted the first one for joo^^

~Sarah