Here are some tips on making your posts longer. I use these tips all the time, and they certainly works :D

~Talk about nature, about the scenery around you. Say if it is cold, sunny, rainy, hot, fall, summer, spring, winter. Example: Snow Star stared at the puffy white clouds above her. The wind dance in the open field as the clouds rolled in and out. The blue sky grew larger, as the sun made it even hotter.

~Talk about your feeling. Something as The white she-wolf was sad that her best friend dies. Tears rolled down her face as she sniffed. Her sadness will never go away...at least that was what she thought...

~Talk about the wolves around you. Such as : Luna looked at the black he-wolf beside her. The intruder bowed down slightly as she grinned wickedly. She knew this would be a nice addition to the Amarth.

~Say your thoughts. Something like: Verde snuck around the field area, seeing a intruder who looked as one of the Amarth. With a mad look, Verde slipped past the gnarled branches of the oak wood trees. 'When will these intruders learn?' he thought, letting a depe sight go.

~More Might Be Added Soon~

well, i think I can add something here, be descriptive people, see those two or three sentances she put for each section for examples? with enough imagination you could turn that into an entire paragraph of reasonable length by itself thus giving your posts the feeling that you could actually be there.

For example, I'll use one of her's and then show you how it can be extended ebven longer through the power of the mind.

Original: Snow Star stared at the puffy white clouds above her. The wind dance in the open field as the clouds rolled in and out. The blue sky grew larger, as the sun made it even hotter.

New: Snow Star stared at the puffy white clouds above her, noticing that a few of them seemed to change shapes while they floated along above her. The wind danced in the open field as the clouds rolled in and out, besides just moving the clouds the wind also ruffled through the white fae's fur, letting it sway in the wind with the grass. The blue sky seemed to grow larger as the white clouds were pushed away, revealing the sun as it made the air around her even hotter.

Yes, that is how people should write. I was just putting up examples, but thats good too XP

true, and I was just putting up a tip that can help people make even better posts <.<

yep, the more the better! XP

*waddles in* I must admit, I do have something I would like to add as well..


It seems to me as if folks are unsure as to when to break for a paragraph, and simply starting a new one wherever it looks good. This is a no no, and makes things harder to read and comprehend. I think there are two ways to do it (there may be more) and these are the two ways I use most often::

Large, ebon male's head turned, his golden-yellow eyes aglow with interest. Where did this strange newcomer come from that he looked so odd? And, this new one was definately something Dulac had never seen before. With fur the color of copper ore, matching eyes of molten gold, and a slim, proud bodice, he was certainly a sight to behold. Dulac's eyes narrowed for a moment, his maw open, searching for words. Speaking to others was not something the ugly Dulac liked to do...

Hello.

He finally managed to choke out a word, and instantly was ashamed. Perhaps it was his old life that made him this way, so ugly, so easily hurt...

See how I set the words aside in their own little paragraph thing? This makes things WAAY simpler to read. Of course, if you want to add things like He said or She said it looks a bit awkward. So this is not reccomended for those with two characters to an account.


Another way to do it is simply set things off by topic. Like:
Thin, ashen femora picked her way carefully though the forest, her amber eyes bright and curious. They wandered upwards for a moment, watching the progress of a lone bird as it gave way to the wind, spreading it's winds and soaring upwards on a thermal. It was amazing here, with the thin tree trunks and the colored leaves. She wished she could stay forever...

But the forest was not the only thing beautiful in the area;Renal was quite good looking herself, with her slender muzzle and lightfooted gait...


*nods* I'm done rambling now, just wanted to point that out.